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<blockquote data-quote="Ms Southworth" data-source="post: 55154" data-attributes="member: 312"><p>Okay, I promised Karin a full review of episode 4 in Karin and Jenny's amazing fanfic! And I always keep my promises! <img src="data:image/gif;base64,R0lGODlhAQABAIAAAAAAAP///yH5BAEAAAAALAAAAAABAAEAAAIBRAA7" class="smilie smilie--sprite smilie--sprite2" alt=";)" title="Wink ;)" loading="lazy" data-shortname=";)" /></p><p></p><p>When Karin began posting episode 4, the fanfic had had 11,000 views! As of today, the fanfic has surpassed an astonishing 17,259 views!!! Quite an accomplishment, don't you think? <img src="http://yoursmiles.org/msmile/fun/m0157.gif" class="smilie" loading="lazy" alt=":dance:" title="Dance :dance:" data-shortname=":dance:" /> <strong>Congratulations</strong> to both Karin and Jenny! :10::10::10::10::10::10::10:</p><p></p><p>When I first began reading episode 4, I was expecting it to deal a lot with the Wade's due to the episode titel, "The Wade's is back"! (English isn't my first language, but shouldn't it be "The Wade's are back"?).</p><p></p><p>It's no secret that Jenna, Charlie, and Lucas aren't my favorite characters, so I was preparing myself for "hard" times. But to my surprise, the episode only had one long scene with the Wade's (i.e. when Jenna reveals to Lucas that Ray is not his biological father), whereas the other ten Wade scenes were all rather short! <img src="http://yoursmiles.org/msmile/think/m1703.gif" class="smilie" loading="lazy" alt=":think:" title="Think :think:" data-shortname=":think:" /></p><p></p><p>Another thing that I noticed that left me a bit puzzled, was that the "Wade's" didn't make an "appearance" in this episode until scene #9. <img src="http://yoursmiles.org/msmile/think/m1714.gif" class="smilie" loading="lazy" alt=":confuse:" title="Confuse :confuse:" data-shortname=":confuse:" /></p><p></p><p>Initially, I thought that episode 4 would end where the "Wade's" would make their presence in Dallas known to all the Ewings, i.e. a "cliff hanger" at Southfork where Jenna would have shown up leaving everyone shocked! I was surprised that the episode ended with the Wade's living in a luxurious hotel suite and Lucas revealing his "secret"! <img src="data:image/gif;base64,R0lGODlhAQABAIAAAAAAAP///yH5BAEAAAAALAAAAAABAAEAAAIBRAA7" class="smilie smilie--sprite smilie--sprite9" alt=":eek:" title="Eek! :eek:" loading="lazy" data-shortname=":eek:" /> However, I wasn't surprised that Jenna (and Charlie), once again, would end up staying in a fancy place paid for by someone else! Remember when Jenna accepted the huge monetary gift from Bobby in "Old Acquaintance" (when Maynard Andersson had "let her go")? Jenna still "fits" the picture that I have of her in my head (unfortunately)! <img src="data:image/gif;base64,R0lGODlhAQABAIAAAAAAAP///yH5BAEAAAAALAAAAAABAAEAAAIBRAA7" class="smilie smilie--sprite smilie--sprite3" alt=":(" title="Frown :(" loading="lazy" data-shortname=":(" /></p><p></p><p>Even though I'm not a fan of the "Wade's", I still think that they should have been more "centerstage" in this episode, since they're mentioned in the episode titel. IMHO, the other Dallas characters managed to steal the Wade's thunder! <img src="data:image/gif;base64,R0lGODlhAQABAIAAAAAAAP///yH5BAEAAAAALAAAAAABAAEAAAIBRAA7" class="smilie smilie--sprite smilie--sprite2" alt=";)" title="Wink ;)" loading="lazy" data-shortname=";)" /> This episode had eight long scenes, and the Wade's only were "represented" in one of the long scenes! <img src="data:image/gif;base64,R0lGODlhAQABAIAAAAAAAP///yH5BAEAAAAALAAAAAABAAEAAAIBRAA7" class="smilie smilie--sprite smilie--sprite2" alt=";)" title="Wink ;)" loading="lazy" data-shortname=";)" /> Like I said in one of my prior comments, I think that this episode would benefit from more indepth scenes with Jenna's point of view about the years she spent with Ray in Europe. I don't think that further information about Charlie and Lucas is really necessary. Charlie doesn't really "connect" with anyone on "Dallas" except her mother, and we have already been told about the big influence that Ray has had on Lucas! Thus, it's really only Jenna's thoughts and experiences that we should have learned more about. <img src="http://yoursmiles.org/tsmile/black/t1607.gif" class="smilie" loading="lazy" alt=":cool1" title="Cool1 :cool1" data-shortname=":cool1" /> (I guess that all these "issues" would go away, if the episode titel was changed! <img src="data:image/gif;base64,R0lGODlhAQABAIAAAAAAAP///yH5BAEAAAAALAAAAAABAAEAAAIBRAA7" class="smilie smilie--sprite smilie--sprite8" alt=":D" title="Big Grin :D" loading="lazy" data-shortname=":D" />).</p><p></p><p>Although the Wade's road trip seemed to go on forever and ever, I did enjoy hearing about their various sightseeing adventures. It was obvious that you as fanfic writers had taken time to study the route that they were taking and thus the sights that would be interesting to include in this fanfic. I give you lots of praises for all this hard work! <img src="https://smileyshack.files.wordpress.com/2011/01/shappy_clap_100-101.gif?w=150&h=133" class="smilie" loading="lazy" alt=":clap:" title="Clap :clap:" data-shortname=":clap:" /></p><p></p><p>The episode had 46 scenes of which "only" eight scenes can be considered long scenes. Thus, it is clear to me now why I often felt that there were lots of short scenes without much depth! One could argue that the balance was perhaps a bit off! <img src="data:image/gif;base64,R0lGODlhAQABAIAAAAAAAP///yH5BAEAAAAALAAAAAABAAEAAAIBRAA7" class="smilie smilie--sprite smilie--sprite2" alt=";)" title="Wink ;)" loading="lazy" data-shortname=";)" /></p><p></p><p>Moving along to some of the other characters that were a part of episode 4:</p><p></p><ul> <li data-xf-list-type="ul">There were several excellent Sue Ellen and JR scenes! I especially enjoyed the scene in which JR eavesdrops on Sue Ellen while she is talking to Don on the phone. :lolo:</li> <li data-xf-list-type="ul">This episode had several amazing family scenes at Southfork, which I really liked (and got a lot of good laughs out of). Especially the big breakfast scene in the beginning of the episode was brilliant and very "Dallas"-like). <img src="http://yoursmiles.org/ksmile/babe/k0512.gif" class="smilie" loading="lazy" alt=":gotcha:" title="Gotcha :gotcha:" data-shortname=":gotcha:" /></li> <li data-xf-list-type="ul">I loved all the Bobby and Pam scenes surrounding their reconciliation! <img src="http://yoursmiles.org/ksmile/babe/k05142.gif" class="smilie" loading="lazy" alt=":kiss:" title="Kiss :kiss:" data-shortname=":kiss:" /><img src="http://yoursmiles.org/ksmile/babe/k05142.gif" class="smilie" loading="lazy" alt=":kiss:" title="Kiss :kiss:" data-shortname=":kiss:" /><img src="http://yoursmiles.org/ksmile/babe/k05142.gif" class="smilie" loading="lazy" alt=":kiss:" title="Kiss :kiss:" data-shortname=":kiss:" /> (I was a bit surprised to read that Pam was sun tanning by the pool! On one hand, she must still have scars from her accident. On the other hand, I thought that former skin cancer patients tried to stay out of the sun, but maybe I'm completely wrong? <img src="http://yoursmiles.org/msmile/think/m1714.gif" class="smilie" loading="lazy" alt=":confuse:" title="Confuse :confuse:" data-shortname=":confuse:" /> Maybe I'm just reading too much into it, because it most certainly was a scene that very much so was like "stepping back in time" to the 80's, when the Ewing wives would relax by the pool, while the men were at work! <img src="data:image/gif;base64,R0lGODlhAQABAIAAAAAAAP///yH5BAEAAAAALAAAAAABAAEAAAIBRAA7" class="smilie smilie--sprite smilie--sprite2" alt=";)" title="Wink ;)" loading="lazy" data-shortname=";)" />).</li> <li data-xf-list-type="ul">I loved the scenes with John Ross and Christopher! <img src="http://yoursmiles.org/ksmile/babe/k05164.gif" class="smilie" loading="lazy" alt=":jolly:" title="Jolly :jolly:" data-shortname=":jolly:" /></li> <li data-xf-list-type="ul">I look forward to scenes with just Bobby/Rebecca, Ray/Margaret, and Cliff/Becky! How will these fathers explore their relationships with their daughters? <img src="http://yoursmiles.org/ksmile/babe/k05142.gif" class="smilie" loading="lazy" alt=":kiss:" title="Kiss :kiss:" data-shortname=":kiss:" /></li> <li data-xf-list-type="ul">I loved the scene in which Pam finally sits down and talks to Christopher! <img src="http://yoursmiles.org/tsmile/tears/t2339.gif" class="smilie" loading="lazy" alt=":cry:" title="Cry :cry:" data-shortname=":cry:" /> <img src="http://yoursmiles.org/ksmile/babe/k05142.gif" class="smilie" loading="lazy" alt=":kiss:" title="Kiss :kiss:" data-shortname=":kiss:" /> It was a lot shorter than I had imagined, but I think that Bobby did give Pam good advice, so that Pam let her son ask the questions and thus lead the conversation! :wink@</li> <li data-xf-list-type="ul">I loved the scene in which Christopher and Rebecca decide to wipe the slate clean and start over! <img src="http://yoursmiles.org/ksmile/babe/k05142.gif" class="smilie" loading="lazy" alt=":kiss:" title="Kiss :kiss:" data-shortname=":kiss:" /> (I wish that Pam would take Christopher to L.A. and show him all the things in her house that reflects just how much connection she always tried to have with her former life in Dallas! Christopher would feel so much more loved, I imagine! <img src="http://yoursmiles.org/ksmile/babe/k05142.gif" class="smilie" loading="lazy" alt=":kiss:" title="Kiss :kiss:" data-shortname=":kiss:" /> ).</li> <li data-xf-list-type="ul">The storylines with Lucy and Mitch are okay, but I hope that they will pick up "speed" in future episodes! <img src="http://yoursmiles.org/ksmile/babe/k05208.gif" class="smilie" loading="lazy" alt=":wave:" title="Wave :wave:" data-shortname=":wave:" /></li> </ul><p>When you (Karin) and your sister decided to include so many characters in your fanfic, you most certainly didn't take the easy route! I can only imagine how difficult it would be to write indepth storylines for as many characters as you have taken on! <img src="https://smileyshack.files.wordpress.com/2011/01/shappy_clap_100-101.gif?w=150&h=133" class="smilie" loading="lazy" alt=":clap:" title="Clap :clap:" data-shortname=":clap:" /> Keep up the good work! <img src="http://yoursmiles.org/ksmile/babe/k05164.gif" class="smilie" loading="lazy" alt=":jolly:" title="Jolly :jolly:" data-shortname=":jolly:" /></p><p></p><p>I for one am looking forward to reading the next 96 episodes! <img src="http://yoursmiles.org/ksmile/babe/k05142.gif" class="smilie" loading="lazy" alt=":kiss:" title="Kiss :kiss:" data-shortname=":kiss:" /><img src="http://yoursmiles.org/ksmile/babe/k05142.gif" class="smilie" loading="lazy" alt=":kiss:" title="Kiss :kiss:" data-shortname=":kiss:" /><img src="http://yoursmiles.org/ksmile/babe/k05142.gif" class="smilie" loading="lazy" alt=":kiss:" title="Kiss :kiss:" data-shortname=":kiss:" /></p><p></p><p>Please start posting episode 5 real soon! <img src="http://www.allsmileys.com/files/sweetim-communicate/6278.gif" class="smilie" loading="lazy" alt=":best:" title="Best :best:" data-shortname=":best:" /></p></blockquote><p></p>
[QUOTE="Ms Southworth, post: 55154, member: 312"] Okay, I promised Karin a full review of episode 4 in Karin and Jenny's amazing fanfic! And I always keep my promises! ;) When Karin began posting episode 4, the fanfic had had 11,000 views! As of today, the fanfic has surpassed an astonishing 17,259 views!!! Quite an accomplishment, don't you think? :dance: [B]Congratulations[/B] to both Karin and Jenny! :10::10::10::10::10::10::10: When I first began reading episode 4, I was expecting it to deal a lot with the Wade's due to the episode titel, "The Wade's is back"! (English isn't my first language, but shouldn't it be "The Wade's are back"?). It's no secret that Jenna, Charlie, and Lucas aren't my favorite characters, so I was preparing myself for "hard" times. But to my surprise, the episode only had one long scene with the Wade's (i.e. when Jenna reveals to Lucas that Ray is not his biological father), whereas the other ten Wade scenes were all rather short! :think: Another thing that I noticed that left me a bit puzzled, was that the "Wade's" didn't make an "appearance" in this episode until scene #9. :confuse: Initially, I thought that episode 4 would end where the "Wade's" would make their presence in Dallas known to all the Ewings, i.e. a "cliff hanger" at Southfork where Jenna would have shown up leaving everyone shocked! I was surprised that the episode ended with the Wade's living in a luxurious hotel suite and Lucas revealing his "secret"! :eek: However, I wasn't surprised that Jenna (and Charlie), once again, would end up staying in a fancy place paid for by someone else! Remember when Jenna accepted the huge monetary gift from Bobby in "Old Acquaintance" (when Maynard Andersson had "let her go")? Jenna still "fits" the picture that I have of her in my head (unfortunately)! :( Even though I'm not a fan of the "Wade's", I still think that they should have been more "centerstage" in this episode, since they're mentioned in the episode titel. IMHO, the other Dallas characters managed to steal the Wade's thunder! ;) This episode had eight long scenes, and the Wade's only were "represented" in one of the long scenes! ;) Like I said in one of my prior comments, I think that this episode would benefit from more indepth scenes with Jenna's point of view about the years she spent with Ray in Europe. I don't think that further information about Charlie and Lucas is really necessary. Charlie doesn't really "connect" with anyone on "Dallas" except her mother, and we have already been told about the big influence that Ray has had on Lucas! Thus, it's really only Jenna's thoughts and experiences that we should have learned more about. :cool1 (I guess that all these "issues" would go away, if the episode titel was changed! :D). Although the Wade's road trip seemed to go on forever and ever, I did enjoy hearing about their various sightseeing adventures. It was obvious that you as fanfic writers had taken time to study the route that they were taking and thus the sights that would be interesting to include in this fanfic. I give you lots of praises for all this hard work! :clap: The episode had 46 scenes of which "only" eight scenes can be considered long scenes. Thus, it is clear to me now why I often felt that there were lots of short scenes without much depth! One could argue that the balance was perhaps a bit off! ;) Moving along to some of the other characters that were a part of episode 4: [LIST] [*]There were several excellent Sue Ellen and JR scenes! I especially enjoyed the scene in which JR eavesdrops on Sue Ellen while she is talking to Don on the phone. :lolo: [*]This episode had several amazing family scenes at Southfork, which I really liked (and got a lot of good laughs out of). Especially the big breakfast scene in the beginning of the episode was brilliant and very "Dallas"-like). :gotcha: [*]I loved all the Bobby and Pam scenes surrounding their reconciliation! :kiss::kiss::kiss: (I was a bit surprised to read that Pam was sun tanning by the pool! On one hand, she must still have scars from her accident. On the other hand, I thought that former skin cancer patients tried to stay out of the sun, but maybe I'm completely wrong? :confuse: Maybe I'm just reading too much into it, because it most certainly was a scene that very much so was like "stepping back in time" to the 80's, when the Ewing wives would relax by the pool, while the men were at work! ;)). [*]I loved the scenes with John Ross and Christopher! :jolly: [*]I look forward to scenes with just Bobby/Rebecca, Ray/Margaret, and Cliff/Becky! How will these fathers explore their relationships with their daughters? :kiss: [*]I loved the scene in which Pam finally sits down and talks to Christopher! :cry: :kiss: It was a lot shorter than I had imagined, but I think that Bobby did give Pam good advice, so that Pam let her son ask the questions and thus lead the conversation! :wink@ [*]I loved the scene in which Christopher and Rebecca decide to wipe the slate clean and start over! :kiss: (I wish that Pam would take Christopher to L.A. and show him all the things in her house that reflects just how much connection she always tried to have with her former life in Dallas! Christopher would feel so much more loved, I imagine! :kiss: ). [*]The storylines with Lucy and Mitch are okay, but I hope that they will pick up "speed" in future episodes! :wave: [/LIST] When you (Karin) and your sister decided to include so many characters in your fanfic, you most certainly didn't take the easy route! I can only imagine how difficult it would be to write indepth storylines for as many characters as you have taken on! :clap: Keep up the good work! :jolly: I for one am looking forward to reading the next 96 episodes! :kiss::kiss::kiss: Please start posting episode 5 real soon! :best: [/QUOTE]
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