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<blockquote data-quote="Presea" data-source="post: 56295" data-attributes="member: 24">Another hilarious Lucas scene! Clearly, nothing is going to stop him from getting anything car related. Lol. I swear, it has gotten to the point where I am looking forward to his reactions to everyone at Southfork more than Jenna&#039;s! Charlie just annoys me more than anything else, but I will admit that it is amusing how you have continued with the theme of her Randy obsession from the show. I wonder what would happen if he actually dumped her? Lol.&nbsp;The other scene just bored me (sorry), since I don&#039;t see any real purpose for this Jennifer Nelson character now that it has been established that there will be an Oil Baron&#039;s Ball.&nbsp;I don&#039;t know if you are just writing these scenes now, or if you are still taking them from what you and your co-author wrote back in the 90s, but I think that the real story needs to move a bit faster, not just focus so much on Jenna and company travelling and/or at hotels (although I love the Lucas stuff) and your OC scenes. Sorry if all of that sounds too much like constructive criticism, but that was just the writer in me speaking. Your story is still wonderful overall.</blockquote>

[QUOTE="Presea, post: 56295, member: 24"] Another hilarious Lucas scene! Clearly, nothing is going to stop him from getting anything car related. Lol. I swear, it has gotten to the point where I am looking forward to his reactions to everyone at Southfork more than Jenna's! Charlie just annoys me more than anything else, but I will admit that it is amusing how you have continued with the theme of her Randy obsession from the show. I wonder what would happen if he actually dumped her? Lol. The other scene just bored me (sorry), since I don't see any real purpose for this Jennifer Nelson character now that it has been established that there will be an Oil Baron's Ball. I don't know if you are just writing these scenes now, or if you are still taking them from what you and your co-author wrote back in the 90s, but I think that the real story needs to move a bit faster, not just focus so much on Jenna and company travelling and/or at hotels (although I love the Lucas stuff) and your OC scenes. Sorry if all of that sounds too much like constructive criticism, but that was just the writer in me speaking. Your story is still wonderful overall. [/QUOTE]

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